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Post by Shargon on Sun Nov 28, 2010 1:20 pm

when cojin woke up he went outside and saw a saiyan beating up kids cojin walked over to him and said "wow you must be really powerful to take on little kids huh?" the saiyan then tried to punch cojin cojin grabbed his fist and said "..wow just wow i thought you would of been a little bit more powerful" cojin then threw him away and then put his boot onto the saiyans head and said "well you better me happy im not feeling evil right now" cojin took his boot off the saiyans head grabbed his leg and threw him away the saiyan got up and fired ki blasts at cojin he then sliced the ki blasts in half with his sword and said "ok now its on" cojin then went really fast to the saiyan and started giving him a rush of kicks and punches he then punched him in the gut went into the sky and fired a star buster at him then went back to the ground grabbed the guys zeni and said "nice bit of zeni you got there...ill be taking it" cojin then put the money in his pocket and kicked the saiyan in the side and walked away all the kids then said thanks to cojin and he then went into his house and went to sleep
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Re: True Fighter! (Complete)

Post by Cello on Sun Nov 28, 2010 2:05 pm

Hey this is nice, I like the story line, maybe add a bit more punctuation like commas and Full stops. But overall i don't mind this Razz
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Re: True Fighter! (Complete)

Post by Shargon on Sun Nov 28, 2010 2:16 pm

MeredithPunk wrote:Hey this is nice, I like the story line, maybe add a bit more punctuation like commas and Full stops. But overall i don't mind this Razz
uh..dude this forum don't need stuff like that so thats why i don't use commas and the such here as you don't need to use them on this
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Re: True Fighter! (Complete)

Post by Cello on Sun Nov 28, 2010 2:22 pm

Ok sorry for suggesting grammar. It's how most people speak and I find it hard to believe a role play, revolving around TEXT, doesn't even use proper grammar. I think you'll find in nearly everything people type, write or say, grammar is always involved, it is the basis for out speech and text, I suggest you use it anyway to improve your rp, and text skills.
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Re: True Fighter! (Complete)

Post by Shargon on Sun Nov 28, 2010 2:27 pm

MeredithPunk wrote:Ok sorry for suggesting grammar. It's how most people speak and I find it hard to believe a role play, revolving around TEXT, doesn't even use proper grammar. I think you'll find in nearly everything people type, write or say, grammar is always involved, it is the basis for out speech and text, I suggest you use it anyway to improve your rp, and text skills.
...theres another reason i don't use commas and the such...i have no idea what parts to use them at cause i have no idea what your supposed to use them at of parts of rps and the such
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Re: True Fighter! (Complete)

Post by Cello on Sun Nov 28, 2010 2:41 pm

Its just like writing a story, when you finished talking about one thing you put a full stop, take a breath move on. Commas are used when you want to take a breath, and extend on what ur talking about. Here's a link that may help you,
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Re: True Fighter! (Complete)

Post by Shargon on Sun Nov 28, 2010 2:56 pm

MeredithPunk wrote:Its just like writing a story, when you finished talking about one thing you put a full stop, take a breath move on. Commas are used when you want to take a breath, and extend on what ur talking about. Here's a link that may help you,
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well you know what idc about stuff like that really if i don't need to use i won't use it
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Re: True Fighter! (Complete)

Post by Cello on Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:37 pm

Sure but I dont see why you dont just take the time to learn and improved your overall rp, this is getting no where becuz yu want to be stubborn. But using grammar will improve your rp and you could become better at rp with the use of punctuation.
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Re: True Fighter! (Complete)

Post by Cleric on Sun Nov 28, 2010 5:22 pm

Damnit, Nicka. Why are you going around making my forum sound bad?! No, Nicka, that's not true. It's required among people that know how to do it. You said you don't, so I'm being nice and letting you type the way you do.
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Re: True Fighter! (Complete)

Post by Shargon on Sun Nov 28, 2010 5:42 pm

Cleric wrote:Damnit, Nicka. Why are you going around making my forum sound bad?! No, Nicka, that's not true. It's required among people that know how to do it. You said you don't, so I'm being nice and letting you type the way you do.
well..does my thing pass or not?
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Re: True Fighter! (Complete)

Post by Cleric on Sun Nov 28, 2010 5:45 pm

Yes, it does now. You get all the rewards.
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