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Kinai Takai The Sayain

Post by kinai on Wed Feb 09, 2011 4:44 pm

A template -

Name:Kinai Takai
Race:Sayain
Age:21
Gender:Male
Personality:Kinai has a short temper, so he is quick to blow up. He doesn't trust anyone and he hates most the other sayains because when the Ice Jin took him they told him that he was an outcast and sold to them.
Kharma: Bad
Biography: As a kid Kinai trained with his father, one of the elite Super sayains. He quickly raised his power and dominated at his Junior competitions held on Planet Vegeta. When he was still at a young age His father was killed and he was taken from the Planet. He was waised with the Ice Jin race. They traveled the universe putting him in competitions to fight for money and when he got older they sent him to destroy and to conquer planets for them. He grew stronger with every victory.
Eye Colour:Red
Hair Colour:White yellow blend
Parents: Oni Takai (father, Deceased) Ferrah Takai (Mother, Missing) (he never remembers meeting his mother)
Past: more or less in biography


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Re: Kinai Takai The Sayain

Post by Cello on Thu Feb 10, 2011 1:00 am

This is good, maybe add in just a few more details,
Eye Colour:
Hair Colour:
Parents: (Optional)
Past: (Optional)
Just add in these, and this should be about ready to roll. Welcome to the site brutha!

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Re: Kinai Takai The Sayain

Post by kinai on Thu Feb 10, 2011 5:36 am

ok edited
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Re: Kinai Takai The Sayain

Post by Cello on Fri Feb 11, 2011 12:39 am

I see for your past, you referred back to your bio. If you're going to say that, please split it up, so you have Past/history for all thats happened to you in the past. SO basically your background story. And for Biography/Personality, put more of your personality, habits, just like traits and other stuff like that about him.

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Re: Kinai Takai The Sayain

Post by Gokin on Sat Feb 19, 2011 3:55 pm

Yes, what my fellow assistant said.
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