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my first quest (earth)

Post by Shargon on Wed Nov 10, 2010 6:02 pm

your first quest
cojin was flying around earth as he really didnt have much of anything to do as until at one point he used his scouter and sensed a power level on a small island he goed super fast to the island walking around the island he found a dirty magazine and wondered if it belonged to whoever lives on the island someone opened the door to the island and saw cojin holding the magazine and ran super fast towards him and said "hey thats one of the missing magazines i lost....can you give it to me if you give me all of them ill let you train with me" cojin then said "hmm i have been looking for somewhere to train" cojin then thinked for a while until at one point he said "sure ill do it" and then the owner said "thanks alot boy" cojin said kinda mad "my name is cojin not boy understand" he then goed looking around the island and saw one of the magazines on top of the roof he then goed super speed and grabed it he then goed into the house and goed to upstairs and looked in a box and the last magazine was there he then walked out of the house and gave the last two to the owner and he said "thanks alot bo...i mean cojin ill train you a deal is a deal right" cojin then smiled and said "heh...yeah it is...it is..."
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Re: my first quest (earth)

Post by Cleric on Wed Nov 10, 2010 6:11 pm

Approved. But try to use sentences more often (punctuation), and say 'went', rather than 'goed.' Goed isn't a word.
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